Saturday, April 3, 2010

Shattered

*My very lame attempt at Acrostic poetry. Am ready to face the tomatoes so fling it at the end* :P



She stood there like a morbid soul,
Her dull eyes showed no emotion;
And why would they?
Torn like a broken petal,
Tears rolled down;
Erratic she wanted to be,
Reality did strike her hard; she
Embraced her sorrow like a dear friend
Death was what she did not prefer


An Acrostic is a poem or other form of writing in which the first letter, syllable or word of each line, paragraph or other recurring feature in the text spells out a word or a message.



Rashi has written better ones though.

12 comments:

Rashi said...

Welcome to the acrostic world.

Visit (http://acrosticonly.blogspot.com)

And it is awesome. Is it your first acrostic? It is awesome! :)

phantom's wraith said...

Yes the first time in Acrostic... :P:P and a very lame attempt too

Janice D'souza said...

:) I love it!! I know it sounds cliche to say, 'awesome', 'nice post' but IT IS AWESOME!! :)

phantom's wraith said...

@janice aww thank you... You delight me always

Niv said...

Nishali!! *thumbs up* It IS good, darn good infact!

Vipul Grover said...

Hey, thnx 4 introducing this new form of poetry. I myself keep trying hands on diffrnt varieties. Now this is anothr challenge i gonna take up :)

And yeah, beautifu poem :)

phantom's wraith said...

@vipul thanks a lot. My first attempt at such a kind, was suddenly inspired

Vipul Grover said...

Hey here's my frst attempt :)

http://vipulgrover.blogspot.com/2010/04/religion.html

vishesh said...

didn't know you write poems! :D And reality is such a bitch...I prefer to be in my own world :)

Phantom said...

Not often.. But sometimes when i just get the poetic pen out and words flow...

n!ckh!l said...

I still havent been able to figure out what acrostic poetry is, actually just heard the term here (considering how I love poetry and put some on paper sometimes) but then again I could never figure religion too (I like to keep it 'simple'; but never simpler). Point been, STOP calling 'lines' lame as someone else on the other end reading it might feel offended, just like I did. This; IMO is by far the 'deepest' I found in the depth of your rhymes. Also, I already read the def'n you provided explaining 'acrostic poetry', and referred wiki too, from where your def comes from or vice-verse(considering the way wiki works) and I still dont care what the 'type' of poetry is. This was simply BEAUTIFUL, sad but beautiful. My kind of beautiful. Keep writing more rhymes, 4 dont do justice to this blog.

Phantom said...

am flattered what can i say :)