Monday, December 28, 2009

The Path I Fear

I walked the lonesome road tonight.
I felt the void that never puts me right.
Dont know why i got to relive it every time,
wishin tat it would jus go away wit no rhyme.

I stepped on the cobbled path,
ready to see what lay ahead, i trod along.
This time i wanted to get out of it unscathed.
This time i did not wish to hurt.
As i trod i den realised all this while i forgot to see the lilies in my path,
all this while i forgot to see the petals strewn across.

Now i know why i dreaded this path,
for i saw only the rocks and pebbles.
The flowers lay unnoticed,
cause i just prefered to walk in pain.
Not realising that the things tat lay unnoticed,
made my walk down memory lane bearable.


Abhishek Agarwal said...

Well written, esp the last para.
As a general thing - I think you'd write better if you would stop really trying to rhyme.
@abhishekaggy /

phantom's wraith said...

@abhishek hey thanks.. i know i know i keep reminding myself not all poems need to rhyme but i just write with a flow.... really appreciate the constructive criticism :)