I walked the lonesome road tonight.
I felt the void that never puts me right.
Dont know why i got to relive it every time,
wishin tat it would jus go away wit no rhyme.
I stepped on the cobbled path,
ready to see what lay ahead, i trod along.
This time i wanted to get out of it unscathed.
This time i did not wish to hurt.
As i trod i den realised all this while i forgot to see the lilies in my path,
all this while i forgot to see the petals strewn across.
Now i know why i dreaded this path,
for i saw only the rocks and pebbles.
The flowers lay unnoticed,
cause i just prefered to walk in pain.
Not realising that the things tat lay unnoticed,
made my walk down memory lane bearable.
2 comments:
Well written, esp the last para.
As a general thing - I think you'd write better if you would stop really trying to rhyme.
:)
@abhishekaggy /
Abhishek
@abhishek hey thanks.. i know i know i keep reminding myself not all poems need to rhyme but i just write with a flow.... really appreciate the constructive criticism :)
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